I admire your purpose and appreciate your thoughts. While I don't think you broke through the "glass ceiling," into clarity and completeness, I'm not aware of anyone who has.

I don't think it works that well to talk about what consciousness is not, or to use words that themselves might need definition.

Wouldn't it be simpler to say "consciousness is your awareness"? A Venn diagram of what you are aware of, and a Venn diagram of the contents of your consciousness arguably contain the same things, no more, no less. And "awareness" is less opaque than "phenomena" or "qualia" or even "field." Plus "awareness" points (so to speak) more directly at what it refers to.