I watched the video, and to be honest, I liked the way your tanka put it better -- you picked exactly the right words, syntax and rhythm. Or to your point, I got more out of it. It connected with how I like to look at life.

Your mention of "Man Out of Time" was a delight. It's one of my favorite EC songs. I learned to play it on guitar, and saw him play it in small venue. Glad to know it means something special to you too.

Thanks for this post!